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You are staying in an alien country. You have recently received a letter from your wife in which she has complained of your son's activities. Write a letter to your son to counsel him. In your letter, write: what you came to know about his behaviour why you are upset about such activities what kind of behaviour you are expecting from him

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Dear Yaseen, I miss you and love you so much. How things are going with you back at home? Hope all is well, and you are taking care of the plants as we used to do. For me, I'm doing great in my job and I think I can ask my manager for a holiday after three months. Son, I came to know from your mother that you are not studying well after school. She told me that you are spending many hours playing video games.
Also
, you raised your voice on her when she was advising and guiding you.
This
 is unacceptable behaviour in our house, and it is not the way we treat each other.
However
, I'm upset about your activities because your mother and I are sacrificing our life and living separately in order to get an extra income to support paying for your education and bills. So, I'm expecting from you a better behaviour. Please take care of yourself and your mother. You need to immediately apologise to her and never do
such
 behaviour in the future. With love, Your beloved father.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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