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Fossil fuels are the main source of energy around the world today. In some countries, the use of alternative sources of energy is replacing fossil fuels. Is this a positive or negative development?

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Fossil fuels are always used the most in the world
while
.
On the contrary
, somewhere, other
energy
 is switched gradually
such
 as electricity, wind, solar, and so on.
This
 essay will discuss two sides of
this
 adjustment. A replacement for greener
energy
 can make a positive impact on not only the environment but
also
 on citizens. Reducing the amount of fossil fuels
also
 means a decrease in emissions, and it leads to higher sustainability. When a person consumes a product with that
energy
, they contribute to environmental improvement. In consequence, everybody is dedicated to the preservation together.
In addition
, when they are aware of their good habit, they are likely to have more incentives to protect the environment through other
behaviors
Change the spelling
behaviours
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. Altering
energy
 requires a lot of effort and budget. Those energies have to be produced through many complicated processes so the government has to invest more in technologies, high-skilled workers, and so forth.
As a result
, the cost rises up, and it can affect consumer preference to save money by using fossil fuels products.
For instance
, when Norway wants to promote electric cars, its government has to set up chargers and decrease taxes even though it would lead to a financial burden. From my perspective, a transformation to a better idea is a big challenge that always pertains to benefits and limitations.
However
, the government of each country should consider their current situation in order to make a decision that works the best, and
then
 transform it step by step.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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