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Some people claim that not enough waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement. To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their wastes?.

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Some individuals claim that not sufficient garbage from
households
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 is reused . They say that the only method to rising recycling is for authorities to make it
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compulsory. I totally disagree with
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 statement ,
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however
, I would like to recommend some
meaures
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measures
 including,
provide
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 incentives for people , and
raise
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 awareness among
households
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 in order to
addressing
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 the issue of
waste
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 from
homes
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. On the one hand, I completely disagree with
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impose
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laws
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 to force people to
recycling
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recycle
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 their
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homes
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home's
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 rubbish.
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 is because recycling
trash
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the trash
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 is expensive, which
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impose
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laws
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 regarding
of
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recycling can make poor
households
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 under
financial
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a financial
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 burden.
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laws
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recycling increase the rate of poverty, which
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 more poverty
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 more crime.
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, I would like to recommend some actions to tackle
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the
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 lawmakers can provide incentives for people to encourage them to
recycling
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 their rubbish.
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, the governments can give
families
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 who recycle their
garbage free
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 gym membership or access to public transport. The second efficient measure,
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 government can launch educational campaigns in order to raise awareness among
households
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 about the benefits of recycling
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waste
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 for the environment.
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, I believe these solutions will contribute make
families
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 more
interesting
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to
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in
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 recycling and do beneficial
thing
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to
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 the ecosystem.
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, I strongly disagree with
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the idea
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 of
implement
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laws
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in
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term
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 of
force
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families
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 to
recycling
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recycle
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 their
waste
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howover
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however
,I would
suggested
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some solutions
including
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, provide incentives for
families
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 , and raise awareness among
households
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 in order to eliminate the issue of
waste
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 from
homes
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.
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