The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan
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The line chart illustrates the
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amount
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number
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of
shops
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that closed and the
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amount
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number
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of
shops
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that opened in one country over
a
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8-
year
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years
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between 2011 and 2018.
Overall
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, there
are
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was a significant upward trend in
shop
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closures
while
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shop
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opening
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openings
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underwent a slight fall over the period.
In addition
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, the number of both is the lowest in 2015. It can be seen from
graph
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the graph
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that in the first period from 2011 to 2014, the
amount
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of
shop
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closures fluctuated marginally in the range of 6000 to 7000
stores
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. After, the
amount
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of
shop
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closures reached a low point with below
at
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1000
stores
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in 2015.
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, the
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amount
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number
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of
shops
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that closed grew quickly with more
at
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than
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5000
stores
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in 2016, and that
amount
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remain unchanged through 2018. The graph shows that the number of new
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shop
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shops
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experienced a
sharply
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sharp
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decline
more
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of more
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4000
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than 4000
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stores
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in 2012.
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, the
amount
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of
shop
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opening
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openings
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gradually increase
with
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to
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about 6000
stores
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in 2014, the
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amount
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number
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of new
shops
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that is
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slightly
increase
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increased
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at
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4000
shops
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in 2015. That number of new
shop
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remaining
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until 2017 and continued to
decreased
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decrease
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in 2018.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, shops, shop, stores with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 8 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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