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These days many of us prefer to throw damaged things away ,whereas in the past people used to repair damaged items and keep them for a long time. What are its causes and effects.

#people #repair #items #time #effects
It is
fact
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 that nowadays, it is many individuals prefer to dispose of spoiled
items
 away.
However
, in the ancient time,
people
 restore defective
items
 and hold them forever. There are several reasons for
such
 a situation
ans
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and
also
 some circumstances which
has
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have
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 been resulted
due to
this
 issue of damaged things
through
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throughout
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 away. Both the reason and the
influemce
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influence
 are elaborated
further
.
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 the reasons, the most common is
that
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apply
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advancement in technology. To illustrate,
continuosly
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continuously
continuous
 innovations in technology lead to frequent upgrades and render older products outdated which makes repair less practical so
people
 prefer to buy
latest
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the latest
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 models.
Moreover
, the other cause is repair is
expensive
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more expensive
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then
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than
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 the product itself.
For instance
, apples new phone is 1.5 lakh and if there is a glitch in
phone
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the phone
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then
 its
repairing
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repair
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 cost is 55 thousand approximately so
people
 prefer to purchase new
items
.
On the contrary
, the mentioned cause
have
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has
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 some impact too. The foremost effect is that the wastage of electronic products
are
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is
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 increasing
day-by-day
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day by day
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, which
lead
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leads
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 to
badly
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bad
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 impact on
environment
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the environment
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. To elaborate, a survey is conducted
in
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at
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oxford
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Oxford
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universty
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university
 London by Richard Thompson in which he found that electronic waste
such
 as mobile
phone
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phones
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 and laptops,
which
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apply
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cannot be recycled. So, 1 minute should organize some seminars to aware the consumers
about
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of
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 wastage and
effects
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its effects
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 on
environment
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the environment
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.
Beside
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this
, the other impact is that it is a waste of money.
For example
, individual spend
alot
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a lot
 of money on buying new
items
 rather than using the previous one, which sometimes
lead
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leads
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 to unwanted expenses.
To conclude
 the topic, it can be
finally
 commented that the majority of
people
increasing
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increase
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 the wastage of electronic products by which the ability of the
people
 reduced to save money and increased the rate of environmental degradations.
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