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Some people think that space exploration is a waste of resources. Others think that it is essential for mankind to continue to explore the universe in which we live. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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It is thought that
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exploration
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 is a waste of resources,
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 there are others who think that
exploration
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 of the
universe
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 in which we live is important. In my opinion, I believe that
space
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exploration
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 is costly and
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 the government of every nation should not invest
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 in
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. On the one hand,
space
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exploration
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 involves a huge amount of
money
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, and I agree. When
people
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 travel to
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 to explore it, they need some stuff,
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 as a rocket which is expensive and undoubtedly it causes air pollution because of the emissions of greenhouse gasses.
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, they need a source of energy which will be used by the rocket, namely gas, petrol and electricity.
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, these outlays will be spent by the government,
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 some countries can not afford
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 amount of
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, and they need to spend it on essential needs.
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,
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 some, it is important to discover if there is somewhere else to live in
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 solar system or not and to know what
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 are surrounded by. When
people
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 move to the
universe
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 and discover the
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 there will be more places to live in because many countries are suffering from overpopulation.
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, the
universe
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 can have other sources and opportunities for living and working there.
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 is because when the astronauts find other places, they need employment and citizens there, which will be useful for humans.
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, many engineers will have more opportunities to work in
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 industry because they can create more sophisticated machines for these expeditions.
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, it is important to explore the
universe
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. In conclusion,
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people
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 may vary in their opinions, I think that
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exploration
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 is a waste of
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 and dangerous. If
people
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 focus more on the earth's development,the earth would be the best place to live in.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • astronomical costs
  • earthbound issues
  • tangible benefits
  • technological spin-offs
  • innovation
  • long-term investment
  • habitability
  • interplanetary travel
  • sustainable exploration
  • spacefaring nations
  • international collaboration
  • deep space
  • the final frontier
  • cosmic perspective
  • frontiers of science
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