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The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in millions) of telephone calls in Finland, divided into three categories, from 1995 – 2004.

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in millions) of telephone calls in Finland, divided into three categories, from 1995 – 2004.
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The chart below represents the data of the total
minutes
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 spent in Finland under three different call categories throughout the year 1995-2004. The three different categories are local-
landline
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, national and international
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landline
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landlines
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, and mobiles. Where Local
landline
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 was in the lead of the
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 spent and Mobiles
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 the least spent among the categories. The local
landline
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 was facing growth in
number
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a number
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 of
minutes
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 used starting at 12.000
million
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minutes
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 by the year 1995 and reaching its peak in 2001 with approximately 17.000
million
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minutes
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.
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, from the period 2002 until 2004 local landlines faced a decrease of the number to 12.000
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 going back to where it started. The second highest spent was the national and international
landline
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 with a steady increase from 6.000
million
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 in 1995 to just above 10.000
millions
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 in 2004.
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 mobiles were rocketing from 2.000
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 between the 3 first year to just under 10.000
million
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 by 2024.
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