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The pie chart shows the number of people who were using different languages online. The table shows the average number of people online each year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart shows the number of people who were using different languages online. The table shows the average number of people online each year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given chart illustrates the proportions of different
languages
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 used online, and the given table shows the
number
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 of people online on average each year between 1997 and 2001. The most striking feature of the pie chart is the prevalence of the English language, which accounts for a whopping 43% of all online interactions. Other predominant
languages
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 include Japanese, Chinese, German and Spanish, which make up
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about a third of the total
languages
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 used. A bit less significant are Korean, Italian, French, Portuguese and Dutch, which account for on average 3% each. Other
languages
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 are not mentioned in the chart
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 but make up for about an eighth of the total. In terms of total users, the
internet
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Internet
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 saw a significant increase in the period from 1997 to 2001. Only between 1997 and
1998
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 it doubled in
number
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. Later, by 2001 the total
number
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 of people online has increased by about a factor of three, now being equal to 513 million people and accounting for 8.4% of the world population.
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, the
number
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 of total internet users increased significantly between 1997 and 2001, and most of them used
english
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English
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 to communicate online.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words languages, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 3 times.
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