Shopping is the favourite pastime for most of the young people. Why do you think is that? Do you they should be encouraged to do some other useful activities?

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. In my opinion, I consider that

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go to for shopping to buy

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products

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and I believe

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need to try new useful activities

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as playing matches of basketball, reading books and watching movies.

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, shopping is useful for

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is because when they go shopping, they can buy new clothes which they need for school.

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, when they have a match at school, they need to go to the

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to buy new shoes and T-shirts.

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, if they do not have those clothes, they can not play a match without shoes or gloves. Another reason is that , nowadays, most young

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go hopping to meet friends at the

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, so they, can do a lot of activities

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as playing basketball arcade machines, having dinner together, and trying hunted houses at the

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so they can have fun there

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they will have new friends .

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there will be a lot of

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and

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like that they need to work as time to finish the game .

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, regardless of how useful young

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shaping for

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, they can do new things in their life.

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, when they go to the

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, they can practice their reading, writing, and basic math skills through product selection which relate to their schooling, so

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is why

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like going to the

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. To put it simply,

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like going there to do like to do . In conclusion, spending quality time in the

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and meeting friends in a comfy environment are the two reasons why

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choose to go shopping as their leisure activity.

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,

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should consider other types of activities that can help them mentally and physically.