The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018
The line chart illustrates the
number
of shop
closed and opened in a country from 2011 to 2018.
Change to a plural noun
shops
Overall
, it is clear the number
of stores
opening and closing going down. Finally
in Add a comma
,Finally
2018
there are more still closed Add a comma
,2018
stores
than opening
Wrong verb form
opened
stores
It can be seen from the chart that the number
of new stores
opened in 2011 about
8,500 and dropped sharply in 2012 to about 4000. In the next 2 years, the Add a missing verb
was about
number
of stores
opened was
increased again and Unnecessary verb
apply
remain
Wrong verb form
remained
until
stable Change preposition
apply
2017
. Change preposition
in 2017
Finally
decreased in 2018.
A deep analysis of the bar chart provided reveals that the number
of stores
that closed between 2011 and 2014 was in the range of 6000 to 7000 stores
and dropped significantly to 500 in 2015. And has increased a lot. in 2016 and stable until 2018Submitted by yeshomeclass on
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