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maps show how the village of Stokeford had changed from the year of 1930 until 2010.

maps show how the village of Stokeford had changed from the year of 1930 until 2010.
The maps show how the
village
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 of Stokeford changed from the year of 1930 until 2010. By the year 1930, there were shops and primary schools. Post offices, farmland on the east bank of the river, with a garden and large
houses
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, a bridge and detached
houses
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 had been spread around the
village
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. By the year 2010, the
village
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 had changed, and some other buildings were kept in the same location,
such
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 as the post office, and bridge with no changes. The shops had been removed and replaced with new
houses
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 on the northern side of the post office, and they had been modernised and extended. The farmland on the northeastern side of the school had been replaced by the new
houses
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 that had been added.
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, the school had been improved and extended as well, with new
houses
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 found around it, by minimizing the gardens to establish new
houses
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 close to the road.
On the other hand
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, the large house has been extended and replaced by the retirement home on the eastern side of the
village
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words village, houses with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changed" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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