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More and more people are using computers and electric devices to access information, therefore there is no need for printed books, magazines and newspapers. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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In the contemporary world, the number of printed
books
 and
paper
-made things is decreasing,
while
 electronic gadgets are becoming more useful.
As a result
, it seems apparent that
books
 and
newspapers
 will go away. In my opinion,
although
paper
books
 are not popular as many decades ago, I believe that people still need to
use
 printed
books
 in education and everyday tasks. One possible reason why it is important to
use
paper
-based
books
 and
newspapers
 is that
it
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 can help students to learn new information effectively. It has been proved that the information read through an LGD display is remembered considerably worse than that of on
a
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paper
.
Furthermore
, many children complain that their eyes become tired if they spend plenty of time reading electronic
books
. Another reason why it is better to
use
paper
-based products is that the old generation can face
with
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difficulties
while
 using computers. They are used to reading old fashion
books
 that allow finding all the essential information they needed.
Moreover
, computers are not portable,
while
books
 can be an excellent choice in
the
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 long way.
Although
books
 are still popular among customers, and bookshops are open nowadays, a significant number of users are changing their
paper
books
 to gadgets. In
such
 a way, they save the environment because it does not need to cut trees and
use
 factories to produce magazines and
newspapers
. Trying to follow
this
 new trend, companies have been opening new websites for their online customers. In conclusion,
while
 people
arguing
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 about whether it stops producing
paper
-based production, in my opinion, I believe that students and elderly people still like using the old types of
books
 and
newspapers
.
However
, there will be one day when using electronic gadgets seems considerably
sensible
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 than
paper
 production.
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