The table below shows the preferred TV programs by the different age groups in a european country in 2012.

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The table illustrates the rates of

programs preferred by the three different

age

groups(11-15, 15-20, 21-25) in a European country in the year 2012.

Overall

, the 11 to 15 years old

group

preferred to watch cartoons the most,

while

teenagers between 15 to 20 watched feature

films

instead

. On the other side, the news was the most popular option for adults who are between 21 to 25. The youngest

age

group

had the highest rate of 29% for watching cartoons, which is followed by sports with a percentage of 22. Features

films

and soap operas had a very similar preference rate

that is

18% and 17% respectively, on the other ,hand news is the least popular

program to watch among

this

group

(6%). As the

age

increases, the distribution of interest in different kinds of

shows became more balanced,

according to

the gap between the highest rate of 23%(Feature

films

) and the lowest percentage of 10(

dramas). The oldest

age

group

which comprises 21 to 25 years old adults are more eager to watch news, sports and feature

films

than other

programs,

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these three shows had very similar proportions which are around one-fifth each.

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