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The table below shows the preferred TV programs by the different age groups in a european country in 2012.

The table below shows the preferred TV programs by the different age groups in a european country in 2012.
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The table illustrates the rates of
TV
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 programs preferred by the three different
age
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 groups(11-15, 15-20, 21-25) in a European country in the year 2012.
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, the 11 to 15 years old
group
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 preferred to watch cartoons the most,
while
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 teenagers between 15 to 20 watched feature
films
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instead
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. On the other side, the news was the most popular option for adults who are between 21 to 25. The youngest
age
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group
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 had the highest rate of 29% for watching cartoons, which is followed by sports with a percentage of 22. Features
films
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 and soap operas had a very similar preference rate
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 18% and 17% respectively, on the other ,hand news is the least popular
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 program to watch among
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group
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(6%). As the
age
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 increases, the distribution of interest in different kinds of
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 shows became more balanced,
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 the gap between the highest rate of 23%(Feature
films
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) and the lowest percentage of 10(
TV
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 dramas). The oldest
age
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group
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 which comprises 21 to 25 years old adults are more eager to watch news, sports and feature
films
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 than other
TV
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 programs,
,
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furthermore
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 these three shows had very similar proportions which are around one-fifth each.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tv, age, group, films with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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