some people believe that nowadays we have too much choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

In modern days, we have more opportunities to select
the
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choices
compared to prior centuries.
However
, in my opinion,
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agree that possessing too many selections outweighs drawbacks,
while
others think that it doesn't play a significant role in some ways. On the one hand, in recent days people highlight
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technology development
such
as electronic devices, artificial intelligence, scientific success and various websites.
Furthermore
, we are facing various
choices
in our everyday lives.
For example
, few students used to study abroad
due to
the fact that their prior experience and academic knowledge but now students are able to study at international universities wherever they want
as a result
of globalization and the internet era.
In addition
,
such
a cut-throat competition
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based on
choices
leads to
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more
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imaginative and wiser arts and artists. So we have
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to choose a particular genre we want to acquire.
Conversely
, in some fields
such
as medicine, there are still incurable diseases that become troublesome problems in humankind. Even though
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we have too many options in technology, business industry and art etc, there are remaining things that we need to invent.
For instance
, there isn't an appropriate option for blood cancer and many patients are struggling to overcome
this
disease. The available treatment's function is relapsing the acute phase and reserving remission time.
To conclude
,
although
we have plenty of
choices
in previously mentioned fields it is inevitable
that is
still expanding its quantities and qualities depending on our interests and wishes. But we have to remember that there are still undeveloped and limited fields
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worldwide.
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  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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