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some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. why is this the case? do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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It is true that nowadays some
children
 spend a lot of time every day on their smartphones. In my opinion,
this
 is a negative development. There are various reasons why a range of
children
 be attracted to digital
phones
.
Firstly
, with the development of technology, kids can use it to do anything that they want.
For example
, they can use it to search for information about their homework and different kinds of cartoon movies on the internet. What is more, if parents give them a laptop and a
phone
 as a gift, unquestionable
children
 would choose a
phone
.
this
 is because smartphone compared with other digital equipment, it is smaller and easier to carry out, which means
children
 can bring them anywhere and play
them
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with them
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 at any time.
However
, because of almost all of their classmate has their own mobile
phones
 and some students show off their
phone
 to others. So, if any kids do not have it when they are talking about the topic with
phone
 games or other entertainment on
phones
. The kids who do not have their own digital
phones
 will feel a sense of abasement.
On the other hand
, if
children
 play on their
phones
 every day, it will be harmful to their eyes, and even in the future, they will be shortsighted.
Furthermore
, if they are appealed by the
phone
 games, they cannot focus on the knowledge that they need to learn, they just think about how to get a higher score in these games. In conclusion, it seems to me that the potential dangers of smartphones are more significant than the possible benefits.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • smartphones
  • usage
  • technology
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • entertainment
  • gaming
  • social media
  • communication
  • educational resources
  • addiction
  • dependence
  • negative effects
  • physical health
  • mental health
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