The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
The graph depicts the four various kinds of
tranport
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transport
(train,
car
, tube and
bus
) used to travel
and
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from work in
an
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a
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European city during three different years.
Overall
. the using of
car
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cars
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had significantly increased,
while
the amount of
bus
users
had decreased during these 40 years. At the outset, in 1960almost 40% of commuters
had
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preferred mostly a
bus
;
however
, just 7% of people used to travel by
car
.
By contrast
, in 2000 the roles of modes had changed their place, as the percentage of
car
users
peaked its hit (about 37%), and the number of
bus
users
had
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diminished
approximately
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2.5 times.
Furthermore
, the
amount
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number
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of passengers who used a train and a tube as
an
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a
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trasportation
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transportation
item
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items
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,
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had seen stable changes. The percentages of commuters who took a trip or went to work
with
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by
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train did not
went
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up more than 28%,
as well as
, the number of tube
users
changed
just
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22% and 25%, respectively.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words car, bus, users with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.

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