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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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There is no doubt that fast
food
 has an extremely bad impact on our lives. Generally speaking, the main reason
of
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that is
 the way of their production and imbalanced nutritional value in
this
 kind of
food
. Nowadays, modern society is evolving really fast and people are always busy.
Consequently
, they don’t have time to prepare
some
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healthy
food
 in advance. Here comes the best,
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 their opinion, solution - fast
food
. The biggest producers
such
 as McDonald’s, KFC,
Burger
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 King, don’t really care about the quality of their ingredients. The main goal is to make the
food
 seem tasty and make the client come back
for
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the next time. Because of that, appear a new sort of global
problem
 - obesity and it is not the
last
 thing we should worry about. From my perspective,
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 fact
this
problem
 began to spread very quickly, the government all around the world must take
actions
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. Of course, it is kind of obvious that it is a
problem
 which needs
for
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taking
actions
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, but why
government
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 doesn’t do anything about it? The main
problem
 is that
the
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society will not precept those actions objectively. Especially, the people who loved fast
food
. On the whole, my honest opinion is that government has to impose a higher tax on fast
food
,
otherwise
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 that
problem
 will lead to
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 of no return
,
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 when the drawbacks are going to be inevitable.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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