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You recently bought an electronic device for your home. Your friend wants to buy the same device and has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter - Describe the device - Explain why you bought it -Say whether or not your friend should buy it and why

#device #home #friend #advice #-say
Dear Lakhy Hope
this
 letter finds you in radiant spirit. How is everything going and what about your studies? The purpose of inscribing
this
 missive is to give you
suggestion
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 about my recent purchase of an electronic
vaccum
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vacuum
they
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i
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I
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 ordered from
amazon
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Amazon
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last
 week. It is of ABC company with
with
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battery capacity to work for 20 hours. I must say that
i
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 am fully satisfied with its functions and
i
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 can say that
i
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I
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had
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 spent money on
a
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 right device. It works like a robot to clean the area;
basically
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i
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I
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 set a specific area in its settings to clean the dust particles. It needs to get charged when
battery
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 gets down. Actually,
i
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 was in dire need of someone to do my domestic cleaning but as
i
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 was unable to find someone, so
i
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 bought it. It made my work easier and helps me like a human being in keeping my home spic and span. As you asked for my advice,
i
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 can say that there is no better deal than buying
this
 device online. I can
also
 share a gift voucher that
i
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 received from the company for my
further
 purchase with
same
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 firm. Take care Your loving Preet
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coherence cohesion
Ensure a clear and logical structure throughout your letter. Consider introducing, detailing, and concluding each point more explicitly to enhance readability.
coherence cohesion
Work on transitioning smoothly between paragraphs and ideas. Use linking words and phrases to guide the reader through your letter seamlessly.
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Provide a more detailed description of the device, focusing on specific features that make it stand out. This will add depth to your recommendation.
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Consider elaborating on your personal experience with the device in more detail. Include how it has specifically benefited you to provide a stronger basis for your advice.
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Maintain a consistent and appropriate tone throughout the letter. Your tone is friendly and personal, which is suitable for writing to a friend. However, ensure your language remains respectful and considerate.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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