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The shown charts provide information on the way of dealing with insecure garbage products in three different governments

The shown charts provide information on the way of dealing with insecure garbage products in three different governments
#information #garbage #products #three #governments
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The chart demonstrates information on the way
dealing
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to deal
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 with insecure
garbage
products
 in
three
 different governments
Overall
, it is seen from
this
 picture that hiding waste
products
 underground is the most popular method,
while
 incineration is least used all over the
three
 countries
Firstly
, the picture
shown
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shows
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 information about the way of dealing with insecure
garbage
products
 in
three
 countries. The
products
 underground consumers account for about 43%, Farms is about 16% and Restaurants is 18%. There takes a very large proportion about 77% of
garbage
products
 The manufacturers
is
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 2% which is the lowest in the chart,
next
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the next
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 Institutional & Foodservice is 8% and
last
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the last
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 one is Grocery & Distribution is 13%.
There
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Their
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 pie just take 23% amount of
garbage
 underground
of
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in
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three
countries
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countries'
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 government
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words garbage, products, three with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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