Toipc 15: Young people are often influenced in their behaviours and situation by others in the same age. This called ‘Peer Pressure’. Do the disadvantages outweigh the advantages?

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It is true that there are more and more youngsters who have to face the peer pressure problem. In my opinion, the benefits of teen stress outweigh ít drawbacks. On the one hand, children can easily fall into social evils if they access bad relationships. Since the teenage age is the developing period, people would tend to learn and follow whatever they meet and found it interesting without considering the consequences.

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who are drug addiction and smoking, they would be exposed to mimicking their bad activities in order not to be said as an “awkward guy” or be bullied. Let’s take my old friend – Van as an example,

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girl used to be one of my best

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until she get into a new class in secondary school and meet negative pressure from her classmates, Van started to follow the bad tendency which e-cigarettes and bully, now it seems that she has gone deep into the path that could hardly turn over.

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, I am of the opinion that the advantages are the expense of greater drawbacks.

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, mate strain is a great push-up for teenagers to reach their dream. To explain, by witnessing

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at the same age effort and achieve some greatness, pupils will be given a big motivation to accomplish the same thing.

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did because of the fact that no teens want to be compared with their other peers by their parents and people around

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not to feeling ashamed about themselves.

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a recent survey by Columbia University, children with normal abilities could make great efforts in a short time if they are thrown into a full A-grades class.

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, children can improve their confidence through stress from same-age

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. It means that when the youth try their best and achieve something on their own, it makes them feel delighted and more have more believable in themselves, which is the main factor that causes high self-reliance in the future. In conclusion,

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the peer of the realm may have some negative aspects, I believe that they are overlooked by the more significant positive aspects.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 8.0

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Grammatical Range: 9.0

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Task Achievement: 9.0

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Toipc 15: Young people are often influenced in their behaviours and situation by others in the same age. This called ‘Peer Pressure’. Do the disadvantages outweigh the advantages?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Many things can influence the academic achievement and emotional growth of a student. In this regard, peers have more of an impact than teachers do. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this topic?

In the future all cars,buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the diadvantages?

Why do you think self discipline is better than motivation?

A lot of places in the world rely on tourism as a main source of Income. Unfortunately, tourism can be cause of lot of problem if its not well managed . What are the advantage and dis advantage in the modern world? Do you think advantage overweight the disadvantage .