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the line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999.

the line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999.
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The provided line chart illustrates how many vehicles were stolen in four
countries
 (Great
Britain
, Sweden,
France
,
Canada
) over 9 year period, from 1990 to 1999. The units were measured per thousand.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that the highest
car
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number of car
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 thefts were
Great
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in Great
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Britain
 with far range compared to the other three
countries
 throughout the given period. Regarding the largest country with
car
 stealing, Great
Britain
 started at 18,000 which had a significantly higher number than other
countries
.
Furthermore
, the number of thefts in Great
Britain
 fluctuated and reach
the
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a
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 peak in the following 6 years at 20,000 in 1996.
In addition
,
although
car
 thefts in Great
Britain
 experienced a steady fall to around 17,000 in 1999, it remained the largest country for cases of
car
 thieves. In terms of the three
countries
 with the lowest figure for thieves, namely Sweden,
France
 and
Canada
 which had a similar trend in the first five years, at between 5,000 and 10,000 in 1995. Even though
France
 experienced the peak and exceeded
Canada
 in 1991, the number of thieves in both
Canada
 and
France
 decreased over the end period to roughly 6,000.
However
, Sweden showed a rise
by
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of
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 7,000 cases starting from approximately 8,000 to 15,000 in 1999.
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