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The maps underneath describes the changes that have taken place in and around Queen Mary Hospital since its building in 1960 till 2000

The maps underneath describes the changes that have taken place in and around Queen Mary Hospital since its building in 1960 till 2000
The display maps describe the changes place in
the
Correct article usage
apply
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around queen mary hospital from 1960 to 2000.
Linking Words
This
Correct determiner usage
The
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 below information gives
an explanations
Correct the article-noun agreement
an explanation
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 about 3 maps, 1960,1980 and 2000.
Firstly
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, in
the
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1960, there was
shopping
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a shopping
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centre
Use synonyms
, hospital, farmland and car park.
Then
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 in 1980, there was a cancer
centre
Use synonyms
, nursing school, parking for
bike
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bikes
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,
pharamcy
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pharmacy
 and
also
Linking Words
Correct article usage
a hosiptal
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hosiptal
Correct your spelling
hospital
.
After
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this
Linking Words
 in 2000, there is a pharmacy, cancer
centre
Use synonyms
, nursing institution, hospital
as well as
Linking Words
 car parking. From 1960 to 2000
main
Correct article usage
the main
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 road remain as it is. In 1960 there was farming place.
However
Linking Words
, By 1980, cancer
Use synonyms
centre
Fix the agreement mistake
centres
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 and
nurse
Replace the word
nursing
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insitution
Correct your spelling
institutions
is add
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is added
is adding
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. From 1960 to 2000 lots
development
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of development
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 took place. The Hospital large
remain
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remains
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 as it is. The size
for
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of
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main
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the main
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 road is as equal
as
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to
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before
Correct article usage
the before
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 and after. In conclusion, the above information describes
about
Remove the preposition
apply
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the given 3 maps, from
since
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apply
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1960 to 2000. There is a
lot
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oflot
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 growth between 1960 to 2000.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words centre with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "describe" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • expansion
  • facilities
  • road patterns
  • specialized clinics
  • green spaces
  • natural features
  • residential development
  • commercial development
  • traffic flow
  • accessibility
  • capacity
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