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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this case? What can be done about this problem?

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In
this
 century, famine still become one of the most social and economic problems around the
world
, particularly in developed countries in Africa and some parts of Asia. Even though humans have developed sophisticated technology in the field of agriculture,
this
 phenomenon remains unsolved and almost every day we read the news regarding
this
 issue.
To begin
 with the causes of
this
 scenario, in spite of, how much the
world
 has moved from traditional ways of bowing crops with man labour to doing that with advanced technologies, people still lack basic foods on an international scale. The main reason behind
this
 is that most countries are focusing more on industrialization as it generates a great amount of revenue than the agricultural sector.
For example
, almost all the Western nations' economy runs on industries including the prominent names of Europe, the USA and Australia,
on the other hand
 only Asia relies on the production of crops to be their main resource of income.
As a result
, there are not adequate resources to feed all the nations. To overcome
this
 serious issue, not only The
World
 Health Organization but
also
 the developed countries need to play a vital role to tackle
this
 fundamental issue. First and foremost, they should organize numerous seminars to spread the advantages of advanced equipment and practice how to employ them in fields, it will help to ease and fasten the work of local farmers.
Consequently
, more production will be attained.
Moreover
, they must provide special assistance in terms of grants to farmers.
For instance
, people from East Asia who generates revenues for food are often poor, and financial aid will never restrict them from ploughing agricultural land.
To conclude
, developed nations' positive role is required to overcome
world
 hunger with the assistance of WHO as most of the time it is the poorer parts of the earth which severely suffer a shortage of food.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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