The plans below show how the ground of a particular building has changed over time. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The plan illustrates how
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the ground
floor
of a particular building over time.
Overall
, 3 maps describe 3 different purposes of the
floor
which are an
office
, an apartment and a flower shop. The design of the
floor
has changed over the period,
however
, the
kitchen
remained in the same position since 1958. From 1958 to 1984, the
floor
was designed for an
office
. There was a toilet on the left of the entrance
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and a reception area opposite the toilet. On the same side of the restroom, there was a secretary’s
office
, an assistant’s
office
and a meeting
room
in the left corner. The
kitchen
was located in the right corner, and the manager's
office
was just beside it. Looking at the second map. The
floor
was changed to an apartment. The
kitchen
still remained the same,
while
the meeting
room
was expanded and became a living
room
. All toilets, the assistant’s
office
and the secretary’s
office
were alternated by a bigger bathroom with a shower. In front of the bathroom and shower were 2 bedrooms. From 2001 - now, the
floor
has changed again to a flower shop. The 2 bedrooms were replaced for flower and an
office
room
.The living
room
was removed for a gift cards area, and the old bathroom became a play area. Between them, there was space for flowers, and the
kitchen
was still located in the old position.
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