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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#country #language
Nowadays, many people have various opportunities to live and work in foreign countries.
However
, living in
a
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different countries may
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a
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foreign
language
 skills.
Thus
,
this
 may cause a number of difficulties to live in. I agree with
this
 statement for the following reasons.
Firstly
, people who living abroad
where
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 need to use a different
language
 have some difficulties in communication skills.
According to
 the article, most
of
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immigrants suffer from
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 in because of
language
. Every
countries
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 have a variety of cultures.
However
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 if they can’t communicate, they are struggling to fit in their community.
Furthermore
,
this
 may feel loneliness
along with
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 friends and
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. it leads to depression and maladjustment.
In addition
, there are a couple of practical problems. One of the most
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 is getting
job
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 in
foreign
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 country.
As a result
,to be hired
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local
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 company
,
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must
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 be required high-level of
local
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language
.
For instance
, if they
were
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misunderstand their work,
it
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 might
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 some financial problems.
As a result
, if they are not employed , it would be hard to
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 maintain a livelihood. In conclusion,
lack
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 of
language
 skills will cause some difficulties
such
 as not only socializing but
also
 practical issues to live
in
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abroad. For one thing, miscommunication with local dwells is hard to settle in. For another, working as
a
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 employee
in
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abroad is required
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 of English to absorb their work.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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