The diagram below show the changes that have taken place at west park secondry school since its construction in 1950.

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The presented map depicts the alterations that happened to West park high school from when it was constructed in 1950 until 2010. As the diagram suggests, the institution and the main road remained stable during

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there was a dramatic change to the area in the vicinity of the main building. To commence with the western side of the college , which was a residential area in 1950 , not only divided into two parts but

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replaced with a car park and science block in 1980.

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, the farmland which is in the southwest segment was turned into a sports centre, and the playground stayed constant till 1980. In 2010, not only the sports field became smaller but

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it was taken up by

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lot which was expanded from north west to south east chunk of the map.

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, the recreation ground was only just compressed by other buildings.

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, the main road and the academy stayed unchanged from 1950 to 2010.

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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.

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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the seventh paragraph.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

171 words

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The diagram below show the changes that have taken place at west park secondry school since its construction in 1950.

Group or team activities can teach more important skills for life than those activities which are done alone. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

The youth crime rate is rising rapidly in many countries. What is the reason for this trend? What can parents and teachers do to solve it?

If you could remove one school subject and replace it with a new one, which subjects would you choose and why?

It is important for people to take risk, in both their professional lives and personal lives. Is it a positive or negative development?

Governments investment in arts, music and theatre is a waste of money. Government should invest these funds in public services instead. To what extent do you agree with this statement.