The diagram below shows how cheese is made.

The diagram below shows how cheese is made.
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The diagram demonstrates the different steps that are involved in producing
cheese
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.
Overall
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, there are 9 steps involved in
this
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process starting with raw
milk
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and culminating with bringing the shop
To begin
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with, there are two approaches first step. In the first approach, raw
milk
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is separated to protect it from bacteria.
Secondly
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, Raw
milk
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is made into curd which is formed in a container and
then
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the
milk
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is made into curds through continuous cutting . Afterwards, the
milk
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is stirred and it is drained out from the container. After completing , the salt is added to the curd and
then
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the curd is shaped and the
cheese
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is fermented for two months . After, the
cheese
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on the conveyor belt is poured into the moulds and pressed to spread the
cheese
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evenly and the additional they are drained off.
In addition
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to that ,
cheese
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is packaged to sell .
Finally
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, the prepared
cheese
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is brought to the shop
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pasteurization
  • Coagulation
  • Curd
  • Whey
  • Rennet
  • Cheddaring
  • Affinage (aging)
  • Brine
  • Cultures
  • Enzymes
  • Homogenization
  • Lactic acid bacteria
  • Mold ripening
  • Pressing
  • Ripening
  • Salt
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