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Last week, you visited a local supermarket and you got satisfactory service. Write a letter to the supermarket manager to thank. In your letter: - introduce yourself; - say why you are satisfied; - say thank you and write about your future visits.

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter to express my gratitude for the exceptional
service
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 in your supermarket
as well as
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 explaining why I am happy with your
service
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. I am Nozigul Bozorova a frequent visitor to your shopping center.
Last
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 week I went to the supermarket with my besties and I was very satisfied
how
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with how
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 your assistants treated me
along with
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 their
service
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. From that moment I
started
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started to
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 concentrate my attention
to
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on
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 other people who
were
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wanted to buy something in
this
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 place. The customers were so excited with
attractive
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the attractive
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service
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. After
that
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that,
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 I understood that your workers were so helpful and they had a pleasant shopping experience .
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, the cleanliness and
best
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organization of the store were incredible. I would like to extend my sincere thanks to you and your team for
high
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your high
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 standard of customer
service
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. I want you to be sure that I will continue choosing your supermarket . Because
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 store has an excellent
service
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 and quality products. Once again, thank you for your outstanding
service
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. Please let your team know about my appreciation. And I believe that you will keep
such
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high - quality
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high-quality
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service
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 forever.
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Yours
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Your
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Yours
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 faithfully, Nozigul Bozorova

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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph clearly focuses on a single theme or idea. Though you've done well, further refinement can enhance clarity.
coherence cohesion
While your letter generally follows a logical structure, consider linking ideas more clearly between paragraphs to improve flow.
coherence cohesion
Use a range of cohesive devices (e.g., furthermore, however, in addition) to better connect ideas and paragraphs.
task achievement
You've successfully addressed all the points in the task prompt, showcasing a strong task achievement. To further improve, include more detailed examples or personal anecdotes to make your appreciation more specific and heartfelt.
task achievement
Maintain the formal yet warm tone throughout your letter to reflect gratitude more vividly, which you've executed well.
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