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chart
provides information about transport use
in Edmonton, and the table chart
illustrates individuals’ reasons
for using in those
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that city
those cities
city
.
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half
of the city
’s people
drive a car
, furthermore
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vehicle
work
.
Looking at the detail, the number of citizens driving a car
was the largest (45%), whereas
the second
major trend were
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shown
people
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35%. Correct article usage
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On the other hand
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travel
which was much lesser than the use
of the other two. Among the reasons
for using cars in the city
, more than a
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apply
half
people
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of people
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car
for getting to Add an article
the car
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work
.the second
highest percentage of people
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business
businesses
work
commuting reason
. For taking children to school 40% of people
travelled and shopping and leisure activities was
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were
reason
people
travelled which was 40% of their total travel
. The pie chart
provides information about transport use
in Edmonton, and the table chart
illustrates individuals’ reasons
for using in those
Change the determiner
that city
those cities
city
.
A glance at the graph reveals that almost a
Correct article usage
apply
half
of the city
’s people
drive a car
, furthermore
, most of them use
this
vihicle
to commute to Correct your spelling
vehicle
work
. Looking at the detail, the number of citizens driving a car
was the largest (45%), whereas
the second
major trend were
Change the verb form
was
showed
by Wrong verb form
shown
people
using LRT with a
35%. Correct article usage
apply
On the other hand
, Bus and Taxi were both used 10
% of the total Change preposition
for 10
travel
which was much lesser than the use
of the other two.
Among the reasons
for using cars in the city
, more than a
Correct article usage
apply
half
people
Change preposition
of people
use
car
for getting to Add an article
the car
a car
work
.the second
highest percentage of people
used for businees
aim which was 10% less than Correct your spelling
business
businesses
work
commuting reason
. For taking children to school 40% of people
travelled and shopping and leisure activities was
another Correct subject-verb agreement
were
reason
people
travelled which was 40% of their total travel
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