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The pie chart provides information about transport use in Edmonton, and the table chart illustrates individuals’ reasons for using in those city.

The pie chart provides information about transport use in Edmonton, and the table chart illustrates individuals’ reasons for using in those city.
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The pie
chart
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 provides information about transport
use
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 in Edmonton, and the table
chart
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 illustrates individuals’
reasons
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 for using in
those
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that city
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city
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. A glance at the graph reveals that almost
a
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half
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 of the
city
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’s
people
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 drive a
car
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,
furthermore
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, most of them
use
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this
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vihicle
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vehicle
 to commute to
work
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. Looking at the detail, the number of citizens driving a
car
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 was the largest (45%),
whereas
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 the
second
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 major trend
were
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was
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showed
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 by
people
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 using LRT with
a
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35%.
On the other hand
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, Bus and Taxi were both used
10
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for 10
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% of the total
travel
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 which was much lesser than the
use
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 of the other two. Among the
reasons
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 for using cars in the
city
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, more than
a
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apply
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half
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people
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of people
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use
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car
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the car
a car
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 for getting to
work
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.the
second
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 highest percentage of
people
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 used for
businees
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business
businesses
 aim which was 10% less than
work
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 commuting
reason
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. For taking children to school 40% of
people
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 travelled and shopping and leisure activities
was
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were
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 another
reason
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people
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 travelled which was 40% of their total
travel
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. The pie
chart
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 provides information about transport
use
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 in Edmonton, and the table
chart
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 illustrates individuals’
reasons
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 for using in
those
Change the determiner
that city
those cities
show examples
city
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. A glance at the graph reveals that almost
a
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
half
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 of the
city
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’s
people
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 drive a
car
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,
furthermore
Linking Words
, most of them
use
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this
Linking Words
vihicle
Correct your spelling
vehicle
 to commute to
work
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. Looking at the detail, the number of citizens driving a
car
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 was the largest (45%),
whereas
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 the
second
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 major trend
were
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was
show examples
showed
Wrong verb form
shown
show examples
 by
people
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 using LRT with
a
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apply
show examples
35%.
On the other hand
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, Bus and Taxi were both used
10
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for 10
show examples
% of the total
travel
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 which was much lesser than the
use
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 of the other two. Among the
reasons
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 for using cars in the
city
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, more than
a
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apply
show examples
half
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people
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of people
show examples
use
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car
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the car
a car
show examples
 for getting to
work
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.the
second
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 highest percentage of
people
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 used for
businees
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business
businesses
 aim which was 10% less than
work
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 commuting
reason
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. For taking children to school 40% of
people
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 travelled and shopping and leisure activities
was
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were
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 another
reason
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people
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 travelled which was 40% of their total
travel
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "furthermore, on the other hand, whereas".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, use, reasons, city, half, people, car, work, second, travel, reason with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "provides" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provides" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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