The pie chart provides information about transport use in Edmonton, and the table chart illustrates individuals’ reasons for using in those city.

The pie chart provides information about transport use in Edmonton, and the table chart illustrates individuals’ reasons for using in those city.
The pie
chart
provides information about transport
use
in Edmonton, and the table
chart
illustrates individuals’
reasons
for using in
those
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that city
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city
. A glance at the graph reveals that almost
a
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half
of the
city
’s
people
drive a
car
,
furthermore
, most of them
use
this
vihicle
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vehicle
to commute to
work
. Looking at the detail, the number of citizens driving a
car
was the largest (45%),
whereas
the
second
major trend
were
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was
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showed
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by
people
using LRT with
a
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35%.
On the other hand
, Bus and Taxi were both used
10
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% of the total
travel
which was much lesser than the
use
of the other two. Among the
reasons
for using cars in the
city
, more than
a
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half
people
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of people
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use
car
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the car
a car
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for getting to
work
.the
second
highest percentage of
people
used for
businees
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business
businesses
aim which was 10% less than
work
commuting
reason
. For taking children to school 40% of
people
travelled and shopping and leisure activities
was
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were
show examples
another
reason
people
travelled which was 40% of their total
travel
. The pie
chart
provides information about transport
use
in Edmonton, and the table
chart
illustrates individuals’
reasons
for using in
those
Change the determiner
that city
those cities
show examples
city
. A glance at the graph reveals that almost
a
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
half
of the
city
’s
people
drive a
car
,
furthermore
, most of them
use
this
vihicle
Correct your spelling
vehicle
to commute to
work
. Looking at the detail, the number of citizens driving a
car
was the largest (45%),
whereas
the
second
major trend
were
Change the verb form
was
show examples
showed
Wrong verb form
shown
show examples
by
people
using LRT with
a
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
35%.
On the other hand
, Bus and Taxi were both used
10
Change preposition
for 10
show examples
% of the total
travel
which was much lesser than the
use
of the other two. Among the
reasons
for using cars in the
city
, more than
a
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
half
people
Change preposition
of people
show examples
use
car
Add an article
the car
a car
show examples
for getting to
work
.the
second
highest percentage of
people
used for
businees
Correct your spelling
business
businesses
aim which was 10% less than
work
commuting
reason
. For taking children to school 40% of
people
travelled and shopping and leisure activities
was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
show examples
another
reason
people
travelled which was 40% of their total
travel
.
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