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The line chart below shows the results of a survey giving the reasons why people moved to the capital city of a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line chart below shows the results of a survey giving the reasons why people moved to the capital city of a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart illustrates the survey results of four reasons
that
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why
people
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 move to another country in 2000, 2005, 2010, and 2015.
Overall
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, the graph shows that the significant
reason
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of
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why
people
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 move is for employment and the least
reason
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 why they travel is for adventure. As can be seen in the line chart,
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in 2000, 60000
people
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 travelled for employment and
until
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by
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 2010 the
number
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 increased to 92000.
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,
at
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in
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 2015 the
number
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 decreased to became 85000. There was a huge
increasing
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 why
people
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 moved for the
reason
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 of studying, as seen in the chart in 2000 there
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 only 25000 moved to study
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 until 2015 the
number
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 increased to reach almost 90000. Moving to family/friends and adventure. From 2000 to 2005 it was only 10000
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 in 2015 the
number
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 increases to
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20000.
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, the least
reason
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 for travelling was studying, in 2000 was only 10000 by reaching to 2015 with a little increasing it reached to 15000.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, reason, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "move" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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