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Genetic engineering is an important issue in society today. Some people think that it will improve people’s lives in many ways. Others feel that it may be a threat to life on earth. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

#society #people #people’s #lives #threat #life #earth
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Genetic
modification
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crucial
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 problem in
community
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in
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 present time. Some
individauls
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individuals
 believe that it will enhance
people
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’s lives in several methods. Others think that it may be a danger to life on
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 planet. In my opinion, genetic engineering can improve
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people
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 lives in diverse ways including,
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people
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 health, and
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food
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 supply chain. On the one hand, some think genetic engineering
modification
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 can pose a threat to life on
earth
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.
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 is because until now scientists do not have enough information about
long-term
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effect
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 of genetic engineering .
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, maybe
make
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genes
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 modified for
food
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 can leads to
spread
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the spread
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of unknowon
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unknowon
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unknown
 diseases, which have can
a
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negative
impacts
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 on
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people
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 health.
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, genetic engineering for
humans
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genes
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 maybe
make
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people
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 more vulnerable to get illnesses namely,cancer, brain stroke, and heart attack.
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, I would like to agree with those
people
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 who believe
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 engineering
modification
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 will
boosts
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people
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’s lives in different forms.
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 with, researchers can make
genes
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 modified in
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the baby
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baby
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babies
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 before born in order to prevent children get serious diseases namely, cancer,
diabates
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diabetes
, and disabilities.
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, engineering
modification
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 can have positive impacts on
public
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healt
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health
 of
people
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.
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, engineering
modification
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 for
food
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 can enhance
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food
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the food
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 supply chain
for
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the
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worldwide.
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 is because
genes
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 modified for
food
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 can make
food
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 more
resist
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for
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 insects and grow faster, which
mean
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increase
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an increase
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the
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 agriculture harvest for farmers.
Consequently
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, genetic engineering can contribute to
avoid
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 the world problems related
of
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shortage
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 of
food
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.
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, from my perspective , genetic engineering can
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people
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people's
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 health
as well as
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 provide
food
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 security.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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