People try to change their look by changing the colour of their hair using cosmetics, wearing jewellery or even having a plastic surgery done. Why do you think people do it? Do you think changing a look is a good thing.

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These days, pursuing and showing our own characteristics is encouraged in
society
. In my view, there are two reasons why
people
change their
outfits
. One is to survive in the world, and two, our
society
is easier to copy
others
.
Firstly
, it is the era of personal branding. There are many creative creators coming out now and similar to
others
is boring to the crowd. If you struggle to stand out from
others
, it is difficult to be famous and our outfit is the easiest way to be seen.
That is
why most popular
people
are conscious about their
outfits
like hair, face and clothes.
Hence
nowadays,
society
is craving unique personalities to survive.
Secondly
, as you can see that there are many social media coming up to watch other
people
easily.
In addition
,
due to
advances in technology, it is easier to search celebrities' items like jewellery than before. I think
this
made our culture mimic
others
more conveniently.
For example
, I like Jenny who is the most popular idol, and when she bleached her front hair it didn't take a long time to see her photo. And it looked so pretty to me so I bleached my hair like her.
Therefore
, as you can see from
this
example,
people
can easily change their
outfits
without thinking of it deeply these days. I'm
also
a person who changed my own outfit easily, but I don't think all of
this
trend is good for everyone. Because sometimes
this
fashion makes
people
go to the extreme. The news occasionally appears that someone did plastic surgery overly and
this
made him or her suffer side effects. Perhaps,
this
is the side effect of changing our
outfits
easily. In conclusion, pursuing and looking for our characteristics is sometimes essential in our
society
.
However
too much is not good for us.
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