The maps show improvements that have been made to a university campus between 2010 and the present day.

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The two maps show how the structure of a University campus has changed between 2010 and now.

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, it could be argued that many changes have been made during

this

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range of time. The main one has been the creation of a big centre of

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facilities in the southeastern part of the campus that has replaced one of the

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accommodations.

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, the

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accommodation that has been destroyed to create the centre mentioned before has been built on the side of the ancient one in front of the main street. Another

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accommodation has been created in front of the centre lake where two shops and a restaurant took place in 2010.

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, a lawn and seating area has been created around the lake.

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, the teaching block in the northeastern part of the campus has been replaced by an Arts building.

Andrea BarretoTue Aug 01 2023

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.

Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.

Vocabulary: Replace the words student with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

144 words

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