Some people think the government should support artists like painters, musicians, and poets, while others believe this wastes money. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays,
due to
the
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globalisation and the spread of social media, people spend less time doing
culture
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activities, like
visit
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museums or
enjoy
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an evening in a theatre.
Therefore
, many people think
that is
useless that nations spend
money
to support artists. I partially agree with
this
idea, and I will explain both
point
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of view in
this
essay. There are a few important reasons to support
artist
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artists
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financially. First of all, artists are essential for
maintain
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and
increase
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the status of our culture.
For example
, children and teenagers can benefit from
this
situation, and learn a lot of knowledge
as well as
develop many skills, like critical thinking and imagination.
Furthermore
, being an artist is a hard choice, since if you cannot gain fame, you will not earn so much
money
.
In addition
, generally,
this
kind of worker became famous only when they pass away. For these reasons, it is essential that governments offer their help to artists, maybe covering some
cost
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, like the equipment and the rent of spaces.
On the other hand
, in our
society
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there are many other issues that countries must cope with them.
For instance
, some nations have a high percentage of unemployed or an ineffective health system.
Hence
, it is obvious that governments should invest
money
immediately to tackle these awful situations.
Additionally
, there are other types of
job
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that are not well-paid, so why governments do not help everybody? In conclusion, I believe that there is not a “black or white” situation, rather each country should spend their
money
intelligently. In brief, a possible solution could be choosing every year a different area / department that should be supported.
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