Some people think the government should support artists like painters, musicians, and poets, while others believe this wastes money. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays,

due to

the

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globalisation and the spread of social media, people spend less time doing

culture

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activities, like

visit

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museums or

enjoy

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an evening in a theatre.

Therefore

, many people think

that is

useless that nations spend

money

to support artists. I partially agree with

this

idea, and I will explain both

point

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of view in

this

essay. There are a few important reasons to support

artist

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artists

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financially. First of all, artists are essential for

maintain

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and

increase

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the status of our culture.

For example

, children and teenagers can benefit from

this

situation, and learn a lot of knowledge

as well as

develop many skills, like critical thinking and imagination.

Furthermore

, being an artist is a hard choice, since if you cannot gain fame, you will not earn so much

money

.

In addition

, generally,

this

kind of worker became famous only when they pass away. For these reasons, it is essential that governments offer their help to artists, maybe covering some

cost

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, like the equipment and the rent of spaces.

On the other hand

, in our

society

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there are many other issues that countries must cope with them.

For instance

, some nations have a high percentage of unemployed or an ineffective health system.

Hence

, it is obvious that governments should invest

money

immediately to tackle these awful situations.

Additionally

, there are other types of

job

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jobs

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that are not well-paid, so why governments do not help everybody? In conclusion, I believe that there is not a “black or white” situation, rather each country should spend their

money

intelligently. In brief, a possible solution could be choosing every year a different area / department that should be supported.