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The graph below shows four countries of residence of overseas students in Australia. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows four countries of residence of overseas students in Australia. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the selected counties of residence of visitor arrival for education in Australia from 1982 to 2000.
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, it is clear from the chart that the largest number of visitors was from Indonesia in 1998 around 26 , when the lowest rate of
students
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 was in 1987 from Hong Kong and Singapore by one or two. Looking at the line graph for more details, the number of
students
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 from Indonesia rapidly increased from 1994 to 1998 ,
while
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 the number of
students
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 from Malaysia steadily levelled out from 1983 to 1994 about 10
students
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 only every year.
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, it went up slightly from 1994 to 1997 from 10 to 17 and
then
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 went down to 15 in 1999. What is more,

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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