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Business and Money In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country, while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In the modern
era
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 some countries provide
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opportunity
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opportunities
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 for
people
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 to earn unlimited money.
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, many
people
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 believe that
this
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action
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 has beneficial results,
however
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, a group of citizens believe that the government should take
an
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action
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 and restricts the
upper-
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upper limit
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limit
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 of
salaries
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 of
people
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. From my point of view, high
salaries
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 for ambitious
people
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 should not be restricted. On the one hand, citizens with enormous
amounth
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amount
amounts
 of
salaries
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is
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are
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 a great
opportunity
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 for individuals who want to improve their incomes
,
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 and start up their own
businesses
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.
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opportunity
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 not only improves their financial status
,
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 but
also
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 provides a competitive environment for
market places
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marketplaces
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 in a city.
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,
people
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 who earn high
salaries
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 can invest
these money
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 for their side jobs or even their start-ups.
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, these actions might trigger
that
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more
people
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 could launch their own
businesses
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 and assist the
country
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country's
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economy
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.
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, a group of
people
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 believe that
people
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 with huge
income
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incomes
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 can be a
treat
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threat
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for
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 local markets, and senior
businesses
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. Because these
people
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 can launch their own
businesses
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, and increase the competition.
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, I believe
this
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 possible
action
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 only affects the monopolies in the city. Controlling the amount of money that
people
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 earn only cause
a
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an
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 untrusted financial environment in the country.
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, many middle-east countries
such
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 as Turkey, Azerbaijan, and Afghanistan tried to
restricts
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restrict
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 individuals' income
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limit
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limits
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, and they all experienced hyperinflation
due to
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 unreliable
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economy
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economies
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. I believe, if governments want to keep balance in their national
economy
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, they have to avoid
to
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limiting
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limit
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people'
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people's
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salaries
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. In conclusion, some
people
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 have the common sense of
people
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 with
extreme
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extremely
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 high incomes are beneficial for their nations,
on the contrary
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, others agreed that the government should take
an
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apply
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action
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 on their
salaries
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, and
limit
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 the amount that
people
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 earn. Personally,
government
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the government
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 should not
limit
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people'
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people's
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 annual income
that
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which
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 can be an
opportunity
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 for new companies and
improved
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improve
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national
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the national
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economy
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.
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