Business and Money In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country, while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In the modern
era
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some countries provide
opportunity
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opportunities
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for
people
to earn unlimited money.
Therefore
, many
people
believe that
this
action
has beneficial results,
however
, a group of citizens believe that the government should take
an
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action
and restricts the
upper-
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upper limit
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limit
of
salaries
of
people
. From my point of view, high
salaries
for ambitious
people
should not be restricted. On the one hand, citizens with enormous
amounth
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amount
amounts
of
salaries
is
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are
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a great
opportunity
for individuals who want to improve their incomes
,
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and start up their own
businesses
.
This
opportunity
not only improves their financial status
,
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but
also
provides a competitive environment for
market places
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marketplaces
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in a city.
For instance
,
people
who earn high
salaries
can invest
these money
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this money
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for their side jobs or even their start-ups.
Moreover
, these actions might trigger
that
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more
people
could launch their own
businesses
and assist the
country
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country's
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economy
.
On the other hand
, a group of
people
believe that
people
with huge
income
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incomes
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can be a
treat
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threat
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for
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local markets, and senior
businesses
. Because these
people
can launch their own
businesses
, and increase the competition.
Nevertheless
, I believe
this
possible
action
only affects the monopolies in the city. Controlling the amount of money that
people
earn only cause
a
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untrusted financial environment in the country.
For example
, many middle-east countries
such
as Turkey, Azerbaijan, and Afghanistan tried to
restricts
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individuals' income
limit
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limits
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, and they all experienced hyperinflation
due to
unreliable
economy
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economies
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. I believe, if governments want to keep balance in their national
economy
, they have to avoid
to
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limiting
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limit
people'
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people's
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salaries
. In conclusion, some
people
have the common sense of
people
with
extreme
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extremely
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high incomes are beneficial for their nations,
on the contrary
, others agreed that the government should take
an
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apply
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action
on their
salaries
, and
limit
the amount that
people
earn. Personally,
government
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the government
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should not
limit
people'
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people's
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annual income
that
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which
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can be an
opportunity
for new companies and
improved
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improve
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national
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the national
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economy
.
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