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The graph below shows that the persentage of Australian export to four countries from 1990 to 2012

The graph below shows that the persentage of Australian export to four countries from 1990 to 2012
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The diagram illustrates the changes in Australian
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 to four main countries between 1990 and 2012.
Overall
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, applying the main part of
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 went to Japan,
whereas
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 India and China smallest minority of the total. 
It is clear that
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 Japan took the biggest part in
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 in 1990 (25%).
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, in the middle of the total is the US in 1990 it takes approximately 11% of all
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. The smallest pieces took China and India in 1990, just 3%.
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,
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 to India considerably grows to 27% by the end of the period.
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,
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 to China gradually increase to just 7% in 2012.
Whereas
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,
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 to Japan far decreased to 17% by the end of the period. By applying contrast,
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 to the US decrease to 7% in 2012.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, whereas".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words export with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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