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As global trade increases between different countries, many daily necessities are produced in other countries. Such goods are usually transported a long distance.

As global trade increases between different countries, many daily necessities are produced in other countries. Such goods are usually transported a long distance.
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Due to
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 the advancement in universal
trade
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, several
items
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 that we utilize on a regular basis are manufactured in other nations and reach our country after a long journey. In my opinion, there are several benefits, if the
trade
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 rise globally.
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, one drawback is
also
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 associated with it.  With the advancement of worldwide
trade
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, more jobs opportunity for
people
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 will be created. Different types of companies will require manpower, and in order to, fill
this
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 gap they will provide work.
For example
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, if the need for the
products
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 increases in a specific area, more shops will require in that location to full fill the demand of local
people
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. The same is applicable to the factories in other nations that produce those
items
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 because they will
also
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 hire
people
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 to full fill the higher demand.
In addition
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, the
items
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 will be cheap, if it is required by many
people
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. In fact, the
products
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 that are produced in larger quantities are cheaper as compared to those that are produced in numbers. One good example is the
products
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 of China. China produces
items
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 in huge quantities;
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, the prices of those
items
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 are very low compared to other countries.
However
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, the waste of natural resources is one of the drawbacks because the themes of daily use are created from natural resources. 
Therefore
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, if the price of the materials that we use daily will be low, most
people
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 will waste and
as a result
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 precious natural resources will be wasted.    In conclusion, universal
trade
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 is beneficial for the whole world, if it progresses;
however
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,
people
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 should not waste these
products
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 to make them available for future generations.
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