Technology has become an essential part of everybody's life.Nowadays, many adults are working from home and the most children are prefer to study from home.

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Technology has become an essential part of everybody's life.Nowadays, many adults are working from
home
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most children
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to study from
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technology become more accessible and affordable for everybody and opens a significant number of opportunities.Personally,
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tend to think that it has a negative effect,
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for youngsters but
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a positive
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for adults.
Firstly
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,working from
home
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become more and more popular among matures.There are amount of jobs
such
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as a
contentmaker
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content maker
,management,
web-designer
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,copywriter and so on.It is very useful for
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with many children.
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, you do not need to waste time and money
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commuting to work.It is safer. There is no risk of an accident
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travelling to or from work.
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,
this
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kind of
jobs
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do
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not require any special
equipments
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equipment
.Desirable to be
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,self-motivated,responsible person.
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, as my mother is concerned, she is
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a copywriter
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at
home
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one year. On the other hand, there are harmful effects for students that study from
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.
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, a child socially isolated from the surroundings
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not develop their social communication skills.
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, parents should constantly control their study process.
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, the lack of strict discipline and so on.From my own experience,
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was in
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home schooling
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until
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grade. I acknowledged that
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a format of studying is not suitable for sociable,active extroverts and slothful, incapable of
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children. In conclusion, technology is common and vital part of our lives. I consider that only adults should work from a distance as youngsters might be influenced by studying online.
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