Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Currently, many individuals choose to be self-employed,
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of working for a company or organisation. In
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type of job. In my opinion, the biggest reason why self-employed become popular
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is that
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tend to not be limited by the rules of companies. Because of the need of organizing a large group of employees, big companies would like to have
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feel unfreedom.
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some
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might want to
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to socialize and communicate with
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self-employed seems flexible and
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, the caveats of
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makes
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their working
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and resting
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, causing the work-life balance
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harder than working for others.
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, I believe that
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who choose to work for themselves are bearing
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huge pressure. They need to take the whole responsibility
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of their business
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and
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have
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to run out of
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money. In conclusion, everyone should choose the working type based on
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personalities and the skills they have. There is no perfect working condition, but the most suitable working way could
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people
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their dream
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lifestyle
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, providing healthier and happier life to
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employment
  • freelancing
  • entrepreneurship
  • autonomy
  • financial stability
  • work-life balance
  • financial insecurity
  • lack of support
  • resources
  • long working hours
  • uncertain income
  • job security
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