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Student should spend time woking before begining University studies. To extent agree or disargree

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It is often said that attending a place of
further
 education is the best way to achieve success in a career,
while
 others think that it is preferable to start work immediately after school.
This
 writer agrees with
this
 statement and will outline the main reasons why in the following essay. First of all, young
people
 left school and got a
job
. They can do their career favourite. So they can buy which we like, they didn't depend on their parents. After they had afforded eighteen years old, they could be financially independent .
Besides
 that ,they were liable for their decision. They spent time searching for the
job
 which they wanted to do. They feel comfortable that someone is going to university.
Moreover
, they could do many jobs at the same time, and they severed their
lifestyle
. It is
also
 worth noting that young
people
 must do long working hours because they acquire
knowledge
 of the
lifestyle
. They must do hard-working than young community studying . what is more , they couldn't easier to get a
job
 than
people
 studied. They couldn't
knowledge
 a university they donated on their
knowledge
. Taking everything into account young
people
 looked for a
job
 after they left school , they
knowledge
 of
lifestyle
 and worked in a
job
. They lead an extravagant
lifestyle
 and they will become CEO in a company.
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