The use of mobile phone is as antisocial as smoking. Smoking is banned in certain places so mobile phone should be banned like smoking. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, mobile phones have become the most essential portable
devices
people tend to be carried
around everywhere, whether to work, to school or to do some sort of entertainment activities. Some members of society argue that those Wrong verb form
carry
devices
should be prohibited in certain areas and places as the way smoking had
been banned. From my perspective, I am totally against Wrong verb form
has
this
notion due
many reasons. In the following paragraphs, I will explain my position and I will clarify it with some sorts of examples and clarifications.
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To begin
with, there are many reasons behind the importance of allowing the public to carry their smartphones anywhere. The main reason is the multi-tasks that can
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apply
this
phone
provides with the power of the internet. To clarify, smart devices
can perform many tasks despite their main task (communication) such
as socializing, reading books, listening to music, conducting meetings, attending lectures, reading news entertainment and
etc. Those features keep the community posted and aware of recent events in all regards. Correct word choice
apply
Furthermore
, some people can perform their careers with those devices
. For example
, language learning classes are not limited to the centres or physical education institutions any more, there are many phone
applications like Kampily where teachers can communicate with actual students to teach them the language they need anywhere and anytime.
The second main reason is using a smartphone can not harm the community the way smoking does. If smoking is compared with clicking, justice will not be served. It is not fair to compare smoking habits with using a mobile phone
just like for instance
, it is not fair to compare fire with water. As it is known, the consumption of cigarettes is
not Verb problem
does
harming
only the person who smokes but Verb problem
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also
affects anyone who breathes this
infected air ,while
being occupied by a mobile phone
can not have an effect on anyone else but the phone
user.
To sum up
, I believe that the usage of smartphones can not be banned like smoking due to
two significant reasons, the limitation of mobile negative effect on other people and the unlimited benefits of mobile features.Submitted by g0oo0 on
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