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People think that government should increase the cost of fuel for cars and others vehicles to solve environmental problems. Give your opinion.

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The importance of tackling environmental issues has now become more controversial with many people claiming that the Administration need to broadcast policies that raise fuel prices to limit unnecessary journeys made by cars and other
vehicles
. Obviously, I agree with
this
 opinion and
this
 essay will
further
 elaborate my views for favouring the positive impact of
this
 suggestion,
as well as
 recommend practical proposition to improve environment quality. The first and foremost evidence for
positive
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 influence of
this
 recommendation is that the residents will prefer public
transports
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 to
saving
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 their expenditures. In simple words, the higher taxes, the fewer individual
vehicles
.
Secondly
, if the dwellers want to deliver cumbersome goods for a long distance, they will choose railway service as a substitute for truck delivery, which is more convenient and prestige. These changes will decrease considerably the amount of
hazadous
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hazardous
 gas emission released from transport
vehicles
.
Furthermore
, not only
the
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governments but
also
 individuals have to try
our
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 very best in the war against environmental problems. The public transport business owners should improve
their
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the quality of their vehicles
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vehicles
 quality, which will attract more consumers because of their comfortable and useful service.
Moreover
, it is necessary to raise community awareness of
serious
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 consequences of environmental degradation.
For instance
, schools can equip students with essential knowledge about
environment
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 in some social skill classes. In conclusion, I consider increasing the cost of fuel
is
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 one method of controlling gas emissions. Undoubtedly,
all
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the community must lend a helping hand to
takle
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tackle
take
 the issues together for a more livable future.
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