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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: In some countries, it is possible for people to have a variety of food that has been transported from all over the world. To what extent do you think its benefits outweigh the drawbacks? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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In some countries, it is necessary to export different foods from all over the world for residents. From my perspective, I believe
this
 is a positive trend.
First,
one positive of
this
 aspect is related to basic life standards,
this
 is especially for local residents who live in a country that does not have enough area for raising livestock,
such
 as beer, chicken, or pork. If they do not export that kind of livestock from another country
that is
 advanced in the animal industry, they are more likely to eat livestock to obtain the proteins.
Moreover
, worldwide trade is another contributing factor to
this
 aspect.
This
 can lead to local people ordering overseas products or sealing local commercial products into other countries by trade, driving the individuals can benefit from
this
 kind of trade, and
then
 consuming their money into the social, leading to the development of social manufacture.
However
, we should
also
 note that the disadvantage is the higher tax when a variety of
food
 has been transported from overseas.
This
, in turn, local people are struggling with the tax but have to pay it,
otherwise
 they do not have certain resources since it is scarcity in
this
 area. Since
this
food
 comes from overseas, perhaps transported by the airport, shipping or combined traffic, and maintaining the store condition,
this
 kind of processes costly transportation fees for it. In summary,
although
 export varies of
food
 has some advantages,
such
 as achieving scarcity of specific
food
 from other countries and boosting the country's economy.
However
, we should
also
 acknowledge that the drawback is a costly tax where is underdevelopment.
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