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Your friend has just moved to a new house. Write a letter to your friend and let him know about the gift that you have prepared for him/her. In your letter, you should: -describe the gift -tell how it will be delivered -explain why you chose it.

#friend #house #gift #-describe #-tell #-explain
Hello Hellen. I am so excited about your latest news of moving into your new house.
Finally
, your dreams come true. As I was out looking for the right present for your new home. Everything was looking awful to my eyes. Suddenly, I remember your love for cats.
Firstly
, Loona and
secondly
, Spencer, your beloved pass-over carts came to my mind. So I
start
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 looking for the perfect gift, something to remind them of. I bought you a pair of cats. They are almost one meter each,
made
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and made
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 of wood. One has green eyes and is in white colour and she is
seating
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sitting
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 on her back feet, and the other is in black lazy sleeping mode. Thought that you
are
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were
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 going to decorate them near your couch by the fireplace. I honestly
want
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 to send you real cats, but I didn't. If you want, let me know and that will be my second present for you.
Lastly
, I let you know that, almost in a week a courier will call you and arrange the day and the time to pass over and give you a box. Is not a bomb. I thought that
will
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 be the easier way because I know you
are
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have
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 still out of the home for a long time. The box is very big, around two meters long and I told them to carry it for you inside the house. Tell them where to put it. Waiting for your commence. Warm wishes, Debra
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task response
Ensure that all the given points are addressed in the letter.
coherence cohesion
Reorganize the content to improve the logical flow between ideas.
lexical resource
Use a wider range of vocabulary to enhance the clarity and precision of the letter.
grammatical range
Pay closer attention to grammatical accuracy, especially tense consistency.
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