Your friend has just moved to a new house. Write a letter to your friend and let him know about the gift that you have prepared for him/her. In your letter, you should: -describe the gift -tell how it will be delivered -explain why you chose it.

#friend #house #gift #-describe #-tell #-explain

Hello Hellen. I am so excited about your latest news of moving into your new house.

Finally

, your dreams come true. As I was out looking for the right present for your new home. Everything was looking awful to my eyes. Suddenly, I remember your love for cats.

Firstly

, Loona and

secondly

, Spencer, your beloved pass-over carts came to my mind. So I

start

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looking for the perfect gift, something to remind them of. I bought you a pair of cats. They are almost one meter each,

made

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and made

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of wood. One has green eyes and is in white colour and she is

seating

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sitting

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on her back feet, and the other is in black lazy sleeping mode. Thought that you

are

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were

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going to decorate them near your couch by the fireplace. I honestly

want

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wanted

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to send you real cats, but I didn't. If you want, let me know and that will be my second present for you.

Lastly

, I let you know that, almost in a week a courier will call you and arrange the day and the time to pass over and give you a box. Is not a bomb. I thought that

will

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be the easier way because I know you

are

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have

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still out of the home for a long time. The box is very big, around two meters long and I told them to carry it for you inside the house. Tell them where to put it. Waiting for your commence. Warm wishes, Debra

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task response

Ensure that all the given points are addressed in the letter.

coherence cohesion

Reorganize the content to improve the logical flow between ideas.

lexical resource

Use a wider range of vocabulary to enhance the clarity and precision of the letter.

grammatical range

Pay closer attention to grammatical accuracy, especially tense consistency.

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4Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Grammar mistakes
 

8 paragraphs

246 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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