The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.
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The charts
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the
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information based on the
ages
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of the
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who are from
Yemen
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and Italy in 2000 and predictions for
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the 2050
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year.
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, it is understandable from the charts that the maximum
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of the
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of
Yemen
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is 0-14 and 15-59 old years.
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, in
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it is only 15-59 and 60+ old years. It is predicted that by the time of
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there will be maximum remained
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for
Yemen
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15-59 and 0-14, but
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with Italy there will be only 15-59 and 60+
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ages
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populations
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. In
2000
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year minimum
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ages
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population for
Yemen
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was only 60+
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. But in
Italy
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it was only 0-14
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. Comparison
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ages
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of
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populations
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the populations
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of
Yemen
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with Italy, it
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that in 2000 year
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of 15-59
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16% more in Italy than
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Yemen
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in Yemen
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, and
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it was 20% more
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60+
ages
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than
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Yemen
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in Yemen
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. Despite that
Yemen
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experienced
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populations
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of
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about 15-59 and 60+ than Italy, there was only
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result of 0-14
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is almost 36% more than the same
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of Italy.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words ages, populations, yemen with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • age demographics
  • age structure
  • population distribution
  • youthful population
  • ageing population
  • life expectancy
  • birth rate
  • demographic shift
  • population projection
  • median age
  • dependents
  • working-age population
  • elderly dependents
  • geriatric
  • fertility rate
  • migration
  • demographic trends
  • baby boomers
  • demographic dividend
  • population pyramid
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