The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.
The charts
shows
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the
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information based on the
ages
of the
populations
who are from
Yemen
and Italy in 2000 and predictions for
2050
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year.
Overall
, it is understandable from the charts that the maximum
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ages
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of the
populations
of
Yemen
is 0-14 and 15-59 old years.
However
, in
Italy
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it is only 15-59 and 60+ old years. It is predicted that by the time of
2050
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there will be maximum remained
ages
for
Yemen
15-59 and 0-14, but
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with Italy there will be only 15-59 and 60+
ages
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populations
. In
2000
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the 2000
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year minimum
ages
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population for
Yemen
was only 60+
populations
. But in
Italy
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it was only 0-14
ages
. Comparison
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ages
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populations
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the populations
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of
Yemen
with Italy, it
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that in 2000 year
ages
of 15-59
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16% more in Italy than
Yemen
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in Yemen
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, and
also
it was 20% more
of
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60+
ages
than
Yemen
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in Yemen
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. Despite that
Yemen
experienced
less
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populations
of
ages
about 15-59 and 60+ than Italy, there was only
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result of 0-14
ages
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is almost 36% more than the same
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of Italy.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • age demographics
  • age structure
  • population distribution
  • youthful population
  • ageing population
  • life expectancy
  • birth rate
  • demographic shift
  • population projection
  • median age
  • dependents
  • working-age population
  • elderly dependents
  • geriatric
  • fertility rate
  • migration
  • demographic trends
  • baby boomers
  • demographic dividend
  • population pyramid
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