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In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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In worldwide in modern days, people can visit a supermarket and get
goods
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 that are made in different
countires
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countries
. In my opinion, it is a negative improvement. Transporting
food
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 all over the world causes
air
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 pollution and having imported
food
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 in supermarkets can affect local farmers and
economy
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the economy
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 in a bad way.
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 with, global
food
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 logistics
leads
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contributes
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 to
contribute
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apply
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carbon emissions
in
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into
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 the
air
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 and damage
nature
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to nature
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. When
a
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the
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 number of  vehicles which are used for delivery
increase
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increases
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, the transports pollute the
air
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 and harm the environment.
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, in 2021,
according
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 a report by
Cambdridge
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Cambridge
 University, the size of
ozone
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the ozone
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 layer had been getting thinner for
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last
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the last
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 20 years, shipping commodities expanded nowadays, because many countries
were
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are
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 participating
international
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in international
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trades
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trade
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.  To continue with, grocery stores prefer
the
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apply
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imported
food
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 over
the
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apply
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local produce,
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this
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which
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 can negatively impact rural agricultural producers and economic development.
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, the governments buy
goods
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 from the other states and put those in groceries
instead
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to
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of
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goods
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 produced by regional farmers.
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, as reported by
World
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the World
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 Trade Organization, international
goods
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 exchange had been
growed
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grown
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 by most nations,
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that
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which
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 is why the amount of
product
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products
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 by regional agriculture decreased in 2019. In conclusion, the growth of global
trades
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trade
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 is the reason
of
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for
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air
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 pollution and destroying nature, the regional agriculture can not improve in these conditions. As far as I concern,
that is
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 not a positive development for nations all over the world.
Leaderships
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 should decrease consuming products from
another regions
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another region
other regions
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 and prepare their own commodities.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrition
  • cultural exposure
  • competitive markets
  • economic boost
  • employment opportunities
  • carbon footprint
  • environmental impact
  • local produce
  • food security
  • global supply chain
  • sustainable practices
  • consumer choice
  • market dynamics
  • price competition
  • agricultural sector
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