The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the changes in public library settings over 20 years.
Overall
, the structure of the ground has significant differences
Add the comma(s)
, as well as there,
show examples
as well as
there are alterations to the function of each zone.
Firstly
, the tables and chairs that were in the middle 20 years ago are now removed. On the left side, the reading room that provides newspapers and magazines is now enlarged and becomes the computer room with its door facing the centre.
Moreover
, the space that placed adult fiction
books
in the past is now for all reference
books
but the area become smaller.
Nevertheless
, the space for CDs, videos and computer games changes to put children's fiction
books
.
This
place become larger and two sofas are bought to let people who watch the storytelling events can be more comfortable.
Furthermore
, the old enquiry desk that helps to manage ticket and book returns procedure turn into a closed capacity with an opening face towards the entry
that is
used as a cafe nowadays. There is a lecture room
that is
used to store children's
books
.
Lastly
, the zone for adult non-fiction
books
has already been turned into a place where self-service machines stand and where to keep the adult fiction
books
with an information desk between them.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words books with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • public library
  • layout
  • reading area
  • computer station
  • multimedia section
  • children's area
  • reference section
  • study cubicles
  • shelving units
  • digital media
  • technological advancements
  • user behavior
  • accessibility
  • traffic flow
  • modernization
  • community needs
  • conversion
  • allocation
  • removal
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