The development of tourism contributed to English becoming the most prominent language in the world. Some people think this will lead to English becoming the only language to be spoken globally. What are the advantages and disadvantages to having one language in the world?

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becoming the most prominent
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in the world and some
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believe in the future
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will become the only
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to be spoken. It helps
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to communicate with each other
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tourism but
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some
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can lose their
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values. Nowadays, more and more
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become
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to speak
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and if we continue
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and do
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only one
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to be spoken.
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, it helps to
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, we can communicate better and we can go to other
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without stress. For
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they speak
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only
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and they don’t have
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with that and it become
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increasing
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tourism.
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other
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hand, because of that we can lose our
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values and in the future we can forget our ancestors. It can influence
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our vision
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world
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, over time our culture and traditions become the same and we won’t need to go to other
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more
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become to speak
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people
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Prominent
  • Contribute
  • Global
  • Advantages
  • Disadvantages
  • Communication
  • Understanding
  • Ease
  • Business
  • Trade
  • Cultural exchange
  • Unity
  • Access
  • Information
  • Simplify
  • Travel
  • Tourism
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