The chart below shows literacy rates in several different countries around the world.

The chart below shows literacy rates in several different countries around the world.
The chart illustrates information about literacy rates in percentages in four different
countries
and in the entire world.
Overall
, in all
countries
except
country
D male are more educated than females
in contrast
with
country
D where both genders' literacy rate is equal.
According to
the
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country
D is the most educated one
whereas
country
A is the east educated.
Firstly
we can see that the most literate
countries
are
countries
C and D whose educated total
population
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are 90,3% and 99% respectively
in contrast
with
country
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countries
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A and B whose only nearly half the
population
is educated with an extensive gap between gender`s literacy rate. If we go through the details we can clearly see that in
countries
A and B males are more than twofold more literate than females. On the other ,hand
while
exploring data about
countries
C and D we notice that in these
countries
where a great amount of the
population
is literate the difference between
genders
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educational rates is nearly equal with a little bit
male
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advantage.
Finally
,
according to
the chart is evident that the above than
four fifth
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of
world's
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population
are
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educated with males little advance.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to, in contrast".
Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, country, population with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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