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The chart below shows literacy rates in several different countries around the world.

The chart below shows literacy rates in several different countries around the world.
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The chart illustrates information about literacy rates in percentages in four different
countries
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 and in the entire world.
Overall
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, in all
countries
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 except
country
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 D male are more educated than females
in contrast
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 with
country
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 D where both genders' literacy rate is equal.
According to
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 the
,
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chart
country
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 D is the most educated one
whereas
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country
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 A is the east educated.
Firstly
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 we can see that the most literate
countries
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 are
countries
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 C and D whose educated total
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population
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populations
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 are 90,3% and 99% respectively
in contrast
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 with
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country
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countries
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 A and B whose only nearly half the
population
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 is educated with an extensive gap between gender`s literacy rate. If we go through the details we can clearly see that in
countries
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 A and B males are more than twofold more literate than females. On the other ,hand
while
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 exploring data about
countries
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 C and D we notice that in these
countries
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 where a great amount of the
population
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 is literate the difference between
genders
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genders'
gender's
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 educational rates is nearly equal with a little bit
male
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of male
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 advantage.
Finally
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,
according to
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 the chart is evident that the above than
four fifth
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four-fifth
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 of
world's
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the world's
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population
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are
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is
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 educated with males little advance.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to, in contrast".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, country, population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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